There is a lake just north of here with magic
Hidden deep beneath its glossy plane
So cleverly disguised is it, one might pass it by
To do so would be sad I guess, not tragic
But a chance missed all the same
To slide inside another world, who would not try
It is after all a lake just, and not at all pelagic
And once discerned the demarcation like a frame
Will pull apart allowing one to slip in and thereby
Entering an upside down town takes adjusting quick
But the enchantment is such you'll be glad you came
In fact it will be hard for you to think of saying
good-bye
It's so calming beneath the surface in the town with no
name
It's like Atlantis - a place to visit - a place beyond
the flame
Samuel Peralta's in charge at dVerse tonight and well worth the visit just for the plethora of info on sonnets and variations on the form (only one of which I've tried to follow with the Trireme sonnet) - he also details some words on ekphrastic poetry, one of my favourite forms and gives a great example using one of his own poems from a new project he's collaborating on...hop on over to dVerse and check it out.
ha. fun play with the reflection shot...in teh lake near here there is a town underwater....from the flooding and divers go down...never been but think it would be pretty cool...nice use of the form!
ReplyDeleteLove the Atlantic take :-) great idea of mirrors
ReplyDeleteSharon, I must be honest with you dear friend. I find it very difficult to read on this particular blog. The elephant background & white text hurts my eyes and makes me a bit dizzy (which happens easily w/ my Meniere's disease).
ReplyDeleteI like the ending couplet, like Atlantis ~
ReplyDeleteLike Laurie, I had a hard time reading the white font on the elephant background~ Perhaps a dark solid background will make it easier ~
Oh, how beautiful!
ReplyDeletea magical sonnet - loved the idea of Atlantis - lovely - K
ReplyDeleteI like the idea of an upside down town...a mirror image perhaps? Really enjoyed this...thanks.
ReplyDeleteThe play with the mirror image on the lake, reflecting the silhouette of the town above, is a wonderful device for this sonnet. You definitely challenged yourself with some of the end-rhymes you chose, but carried it off remarkably well.
ReplyDeletenice...lakes are always magical and cool nod to atlantis as well.. had a hard time reading the font though..
ReplyDeleteBut the enchantment is such you'll be glad you came - It was and i really enjoyed the poem.
ReplyDeleteReads beautifully.
ReplyDeleteYes, entering another world is always tempting, especially one you can simply glide into. As longs we have hope of getting back out. Mesmerizing poem. thank you.
Thanks, Sharon... I came back to give it another try with fresh eyes (it's morning). What a magical lake indeed... love the upside town.
ReplyDeleteI love the idea of entering into the reflected town - that would be an interesting trip.
ReplyDelete...the inclusion of the idea about Atlantis makes it more deep, mysterious & wonderful to read... enjoyed it...smiles...
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